C&E outline
The reason for the high drop rate in the college
1 academic failure
1.1 student fail in their course discourage them to continue.
DETAIL
some student fear even they try their best they still can not get the degree.
some student get low score feel lose interests and confidence in studying
both may cause student drop college and go to the society earlier.
2 working
2.1 some student drop their class because they feel it's time to have a job
DETAIL
some student feel they have enough knowledge for their work and they think they feel working experience is more important.
like sales man or other job which depends on your communication skill instead of some academic knowledge.
3 Follow personal interest
3.1 some student have specific interest that if he put all his heart and soul in it there will be a time conflict with his college studying.
Details
Like Bill Gates
CONCLUSION
academic failure, working, personal interest are the main reasons for the high drop rate of college in USA
C&C outline
Climate difference between Shanghai and Champaign
THESES STATEMENT the different performance between Champaign and Shanghai during spring, summer and winter.
1 spring
1.1 spring in shanghai always comes early at the beginning of the year.
spring in champaign always comes late and do not last a long time
1.2 at the end of spring, it is always rainy in shanghai
it is very common to experience tornado in champaign during spring
2 summer
2.1summer is the longest season in shanghai which could last 5 month and it is always hot and humid
the summer in champaign is always cool and the weather is changeable.
3. winter
3.1the winter in champaign is freezing and lasting , the first snow always begin on December and the snow do not leave until march.
it is rarely snowing in shanghai. the lowest temperature always just touch 30 F. and become warm quickly
CONCLUSION
Even though there are huge differences between the weather in shanghai and champaign. but they have the beauties just belong to them self.
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Steven, I want you to work on the C&E paper. Look at the thesis statement again. "The reason for the high drop rate in the college." It sounds vague, so change it with specific words. I think the 1st and the 2nd topics can affect the high drop rate, but I'm not sure about the 3rd one. If you want to maintain the 3rd topic, you need to provide more substantial evidence to prove the relationship the topic and high drop rate.
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